Wednesday, September 22, 2010

Free Write #1

Hi Professor. I have to give a piece of writing in for my Introduction to Creative Writing class, and I was wondering what you thought about this:


once upon a time in a cacophony of green
there was black, a sliver (caused the shiver
of foreboding.)
he twisted in the trees, wrapped himself in the trunks,
sensed the splinters, let them scar.
persuaded the girl with the big brown eyes
to unravel the universe, to take the boy down with her.
metaphorical apple, perhaps green too. (or red, hinting of mystery.)
take a bite: welcome to a new life.
snake succeeds, fallen from right, hidden by night.
couple condemned, beginning of an end only to go back again;
start anew.
loss of light the trade for new sight.
coloured the world with blue and loss -
pink and love -
yellow and joy -
gray and hope.
up in the treetops, a black slithersnake observes this place:
end of Eden, fall from grace; a technicolor tragedy.

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